“For” and “against” essay. Living in a dormitory. The second draft.

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December 4, 2012 by mvchaikovskaya

When young people enter the university they have several variants where to live. Some of them choose to live at home and others at a hostel. Both of these variants have their pluses and minuses. I would like to consider advantages and disadvantages of living in the dormitory.

First of all it is rather profitable for students to live in a hostel if their hometown is in the other city, because a room in a hostel is cheaper than, for example, renting a flat. More than that, if you are a good student, a university even provides you a free room. Secondly, the hostel is usually close to the university, so you do not need to spend your time and money or to have your own car to get there. One more advantage of living in the dormitory is that you become more independent. This is clearly shown by the fact that your parents and relatives are far from you and you should make a lot of decisions by yourself. You become more serious also, learn how to cook, get housekeeping skills and many other things. Finally, if you live in the hostel you have a lot of friends and group mates who also live there and who you can communicate with or ask for help.

There are also a lot of negative aspects of living in a hostel. One of the disadvantages of living in a hostel is that living conditions there are far less comfortable from those which you have at home. There are a lot of factors which distract you from studying or any other business. It is difficult to live if your neighbours and roommates are too noisy. Here is a quotation of one woman who had an experience of living in a hostel:

“Your life in a hostel mostly depends on your neighbours. I was living in a dormitory while studying at the university, almost 40 years ago. One of four of my roommates was too insolent and energetic: she often invited guests and listened to music till 3 a.m. Finally she was dropped out from the university, but her previous activity influenced on other’s studies and even health”. So, because of that it is hard to follow your regime of the day, to go to sleep on time, for example. Another negative aspect of living in a hostel is an existence of cockroaches and other insects in most of them. So, if you are afraid of cockroaches, you just can’t live in a hostel. A further drawback is that you should follow hostel’s rules which are sometimes inappropriate for you. For example, in the dormitories of Novosibirsk State University public showers are not opened on Wednesdays, so you do not have an opportunity to take a shower. It is most uncomfortable for persons who are going in for some sport and have trainings on Wednesdays.

All in all, in spite of many well-known drawbacks of living in a hostel, such life has a series of advantages which help young people to prepare for an independent adult life. Only in the dormitory you can feel a real taste of student’s life. I believe that after some time of living among strangers one could learn a lot.

The information was mostly used from:

http://nabiraem.ru/blogs/twaddle/3701/

http://mabiu.org.ru/studencheskie-budni-v-obshhage/preimushhestva-zhizni-v-obshhezhitii.html

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3 thoughts on ““For” and “against” essay. Living in a dormitory. The second draft.

  1. nataneva says:

    Margarita–

    Your opening paragraph has remained as unclear and inspecific as it was. I’ve compared the first and second drafts and haven’t noticed any changes

    Struct: because a room in a hostel is cheaper than, for example, renting a flat – parts of this sentence should be parallel. You have them … is cheaper than renting a flat
    provides you PREP a free room
    vOCAB: “hostel” is a BrE word; “DORMITORY” is AE. It’s a bad idea to use them both.
    you do not need to spend your time and money ON WHAT?
    WExp: This is clearly shown by the fact that
    You become more serious also, LINKING learn how to cook
    What’s the conclusion from your first para? You also need a transition to the second paragraph.

    Body para 2:
    No concluding sentence

    far less comfortable *from (GR) those which you have at home

    It is difficult to live WHERE? if your neighbours: otherwise you are saying that “it is difficult to live”
    Here is a quotation *of (PREP) one woman
    public showers are not *opened (WF)
    It is most uncomfortable for *persons (WF)

    REFERENCES:
    It’s not enough to indicate the link to your sources of information. You need to lay them out following all the rules. We discussed them and had some practice creating them in class a couple of weeks ago. If you do not remember all the details, consult the materials in the blog about it or look them up on http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/07/

    Content 4
    Organization 3
    Mechanics 3
    Vocabulary 4

  2. nataneva says:

    Rita,

    I wonder why you have only partially completed the semester task. What about the reflective notes? I suppose you should have at least let me know why you did not complete the other parts of the task. Make sure that in the future you complete all the parts of the tasks you are given.

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